The ideas I got in class the other day were good ideas, no doubt. However, integrating lyric with montage is a bit harder than I thought. Several of my snapshots are in a way talking around an idea, sort of. They're thoughts, though I never specifically say who's thoughts. I think this can be inferred. So far I have a few snapshots, though it seems like a long way to the end of what I am trying to say. I know I said in class that I think and write in metaphor all the time, but lyric feels so much more different that I realized. It reminds me of charades or something, giving the hints, dancing around the answer. Being a bit vague is difficult when the statement that I want to make is so very clear in my mind. Anyway, so far...
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one
Snap! You steal that which holds my brothers and I together; you send me off into the world with only a few of my family. To the others, I wish you luck.
Oh! This confinement is worse than before. Shoved into a dark space, you’re causing me to fold; you take my strength for granted.
two
“So dear, where do you want to go tonight? I’m thinking we should try that new Italian place in the casino. They advertise it as ‘rustic’ Italian. What do you think that means?”
three
Where am I? This place is stifling; I can barely breathe. I sweat.
four
“Honey, the reservation is for seven o’clock. Would you just turn into the valet area already?! It’ll take forever to find a spot on our own…Come on! It’s worth a few extra bucks. We knew that we were coming to the casino, that we’d spend a little more than we usually do on Friday…we can afford it.”
five
I think I see a light. Yes. Yes. Oh, a weight has been lifted. Wait, wait. Where are you taking my brothers?! Please stop…
A few more of my brothers have been freed. Or have they been taken elsewhere to be further tortured…
Under cover of night again. I sweat. A few of my family are still nearby.
six
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That's as far as I got. I'll probably use parts of the other piece I posted. I hate to keep putting chunks of my essay on here, but I don't think that many people are looking anyway. And honestly, I need help with this one, if I intend on using montage and, especially, lyric.
I would have to see more to make a determination on whether it is working or not, but your lyrical snapshots are intriguing, and that's good. I want to read more. Keep playing with it - keep writing! :)
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